Tuesday, June 12, 2012

Review – Pinkie Prefers her Pasta Plain ... and Phluttershy her Ponies a Pretty Pink


Here we go, a story that got me thanks to its alliteration. The review of Pinkie Prefers her Pasta Plain ... and Phluttershy her Ponies a Pretty Pink after the break!
(That's a spicy wheatball!)

The Story:
On Hearts and Hooves day Pinkie invites Fluttershy over for pasta. Romance ensues, only to be interrupted by a large spaghetti monster, which they need to go to Baltimare to defeat.

…Wait, what? *looks at the story again* No, that's right. Huh. So THAT'S where the random tag comes from. Though why do so many Pinkie stories involve food, monsters, or both?

The Characters:
Pinkie Pie is not herself at all. She's random, but not at all the random she is from the show. A completely different random that likes to speak in foreign tongues and make comments completely unlike her normal clueless self. Fluttershy is about right on though, if you go with the super timid her, not the one that actually rushes to help friends. And then there's a moment so very out of character right at the end that... Ugh, this is why I don't like foil ships. They're flimsy, shiny, but they end up so twisted to make it work that they just can't set sail.

Execution:
It wasn't spectacular. There were wording and comma issues, a lot of fun things with pacing, but the biggest issue was the lack of precedence. Things would just happen with no reasoning or hints beforehoof, including the sudden appearance of things that made no sense but were simply suddenly there. It bugged me, what can I say?

Enjoyable?:
The most enjoyable thing, personally, was when I accidentally read “mangling an accordion” instead of “managing an accordion,” but it might have been because it's just not my type of story. I decided to give it a shot, as maybe, just maybe, it would be the one that changed my mind. But it wasn't, so oh well. I just ended up confused as often as anything. Not the best way to end a story.

In Conclusion:
An alright story about pasta and Pinkie Shy love. Read it if you care about noodly appendages, but don't expect anything too amazing.

The Link:

And that's it for this week. Not my brightest review ever, but I think I have some bile built up from all the failed team gaming lately... Oh well, something better next week. Until then, have a wonderful day everypony!

Your unshippable writer,
~Medicshy

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